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Alteration by ~mormonchick1005:iconmormonchick1005:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Spoken Word


I remember the way I once gazed into your eyes
Every fleck of gold the sun painted in them, I once memorized
I remember exactly how they sparkled in the moonlight
Like the fireflies, when we held each other through the night

And your heartbeat, and every delicate curve
Which I had once so perfectly learned
And each breath my own breathing spurred
And your precious voice my soul once heard

You were my universe's Sun
My friend, my dear beloved one
We promised it would always be that way
But it's been so long since that sweet day

I remember how you held me tight
Your embrace today doesn't feel quite right
The air turns cold as you speak my name
And I realize, nothing stays the same
©2008-2009 ~mormonchick1005
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~Boo0ger:iconBoo0ger: May 10, 2008, 8:22:34 PM
I love the last line. It rings true almost for everything in life.
~Sister-Nightroad7:iconSister-Nightroad7: May 11, 2008, 1:57:26 PM
That was absolutely wonderful dear. You really have a way of capturing people with your writing. I hope that you aspire to make writing your Minor and continue to write wonderfully inbetween dental appointments!

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-Watari ~bishie-stalker-club MINE! :bonk: :mwahaha:
-Zeniba *The-Disney-Directory
-Ms.Z ~DeathnoteXalphabeT
You watch me? I watch you! If not, REMIND THE POOR GIRL.
~SedahLiah:iconSedahLiah: May 11, 2008, 2:12:49 PM
Wow, very well written. Very original, which is hard to do when writing about romance. The emotion comes out very well, too.

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Of all of the things I need to say, all of these words are in my way.

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My Life:[link]
Mood: Wow! ~kayleebuttons:iconkayleebuttons: May 11, 2008, 5:06:26 PM
I got very good imagery here. Very romantic and good. Bravo!!!!

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"Without Music, Life would be a mistake." Unknown
~seritha:iconseritha: May 16, 2008, 11:47:44 AM
That was great especially that last line

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"The most powerful force in the universe is the power to hope, because without it, you were lost, but with it, you could do anything.
~mormonchick1005:iconmormonchick1005: Jul 25, 2008, 12:17:45 PM
Actually, I hope to minor in Medical Anthropology.

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For you I'll wait
Til kingdom come
Until my day
My day is done
Just say you'll come
And set me free
Just say you'll wait
You'll wait for me
~Sister-Nightroad7:iconSister-Nightroad7: Jul 25, 2008, 5:44:56 PM
Pastime then?

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-Watari ~bishie-stalker-club MINE! :bonk: :mwahaha:
-Zeniba *The-Disney-Directory
-Ms.Z ~DeathnoteXalphabeT
You watch me? I watch you! If not, REMIND THE POOR GIRL.
=hauntingmewithsmiles:iconhauntingmewithsmiles: Aug 3, 2008, 5:55:59 PM
This is really sweet, and well-written:heart:

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"You impersonate a person better than a zombie should."
--Company
PHOTOS. STOCK.

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