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Consciousness by ~mormonchick1005:iconmormonchick1005:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Nature > Fixed


When foggy quiet evenings fall
When Heaven hovers low
And almost imperceptibly
My heart beats soft and slow

When my world slows to imitate
The sleepy summer rain
In tender sacred harmony
With all that God has made

I cannot see or hear you now
Or touch your fingertips
But even when the sky is dark
I know the sun exists

Invisible, intangible
And precious as the air
Familiar as the rising sun
I breathe, and you are there
©2009 ~mormonchick1005
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Author's Comments

Even at night, I know the sun is still out there somewhere
And even when we're apart
I know you're out there somewhere too.

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~Caligari-87 Jun 18, 2009, 10:42:09 AM
That's beautiful. I can't count the number of times I had to remind myself of that while I was away.

Your rhythm and meters are perfect, too. I've written countless four-line ABAB stanzas, and I don't think any of mine flow this nicely. Definitely a :+fav:

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If you love something, set it free :bye:
If it returns to you, it's meant to be :hug:
If not, hunt it down and kill it :ninjastar:
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*Tainted-And-Insane Jun 20, 2009, 11:01:16 PM
:) really beautiful, but then i always find your poetry lovely.

Thank you for shareing this with us. :)

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Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but in rising ever time we do. - Confusius
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